Rob on Sat, 21 June 2014 2:16pm
The physical scene is good. However, the varying texture fidelity is distracting. You go from high quality to low quality too quickly. IMO, there should have been more consistency.
On top of that, you make the same mistake with many of your images. You give this whole story in the text. The problem with that is the image should tell the entire story. If you have to explain the image then the visuals aren't doing the job. The image should stand on its own.
For example, all of the story being told here & the description of the character... None of that comes through in the image. Without the text, all I see is some anime teen (?) girl sitting at her computer in her very cluttered room. That whole witch & Cosmo thing doesn't even remotely come through here. Her age age either. Not even a hint.
Writers have an old saying: "Show. Don't tell." A scene is more effective that way.
I like the modeling and much of tthe texturing. The scene is a bit cramped, but it's all still good. I'm just not getting the story. Again, this is a problem in many of your images.